Of course, I am most familiar and partial to Ralph Vaughan-Williams' setting of this text for baritone voice in his Five Mystical Songs ... which I have sung many many times.
I shall try to play through this setting of yours or scan it into Finale and cook up a human playback performance to hear it more nearly properly. Have you thought about publishing it at CPDL? (I can help you with that)
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