Please bump this thread in February next year to remind me when it comes time to program this text.
One little thing, not an error but my instinct is to have the tenor rise D-E-F in m. 13 instead of going down, D-C-C. Original version works fine though.
Extremely beautify setting! There are a couple places my ear wants to hear something slightly different, so this feedback is entirely subjective, if not altogether trivial. So, just for your consideration...
At measures 25-27 the melody frequently returns to D. My ear keeps anticipating some higher notes or some melodic variation here, probably because the Ds are also prominent in the measures leading up to this.
Also, on the final chord, while the open fifths certainly resolve, my ear wants the Soprano to move up to an A.
While I always welcome suggestions for pieces I am working on to get more expert advice than myself, this one is unfortunately set. The point of The "Christum exora" is more a part where dynamics should be more prevalent because it is no better than just repeating for emphasis, I only cross the tenor and soprano lines for slight variation.
The final chord I am in a little more in agreement, except that I originally wanted to have the Tenor make a "Cambiata" and finalis on an A for a fuller sound. This can still be done as a type of diminution for any group wanting to perform this piece. For the hymn in general, I kept in mind the season this is ascribed for.
Even though it is not a true Cantus Firmus motet, I have different sections keep parts of the chant melody throughout, and seeing as the Soprano had most of the original melody It was more fitting to have it make the step down to a finalis of "fa", as is the case for chants/motets in mode 6.
If you wish I can revise the ending to reflect what I explained.
There’s no need to revise the ending on my account. I hope I did not come across as sounding critical. My feedback is anything but; for the work, as it is, is quite impressive, and I echo the praise of the other posters. I’m certainly no expert, though I dabble in composition myself. Looking forward to hearing more of your work.
no you were not coming across as critical. Every composer has their own little styles and takes on how they want to interpret a work, unlike people who just want to sing a piece on account of its beauty, I'm more driven by the "why" voices move and interact with each other.
I will be posting more stuff in the future, hopefully this weekend I will put the final touches on a larger scale work that I've been sitting on.
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