Out of curiosity, what program are you using? It looks like 3 beats have been hidden or erased in the upbeat bar.

Tenor first system entails a lot of guesswork.

…With-out end. __ A-men (word extension line, with or without dotted slur, unless something else intended.)

If ca·lam·i·ty were correctly hyphenated the spelling wouldn't be as much of an excuse for stumbling ;-)

Hopefully this is better, I will keep the anacrusis (pickup note). Let me know if there is anything else, and thank you in advance.

The Latin text is much more appealing than the English, and it has a consistent 7.7.7.6 meter; and the verses rhyme with each other neatly:

Si quaeris miracula,
Mors, error calamitas,
Daemon, lepra fugiunt,
Aegri surgunt sani.

Ant: Cedunt mare, vincula:
Membra resque, perditas
Petunt et accipiunt
Iuvenes et cani.

Pereunt pericula,
Cessat et necessitas:
Narrent hi, qui sentiunt,
Dicant Paduani.

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Here's a rather literal translation:

If you seek miracles,
Death, error, calamity,
Demon and leprosy flee
The sick arise, healthy.

(Refrain:)
Seas yield, and chains;
members and things lost
they ask and receive,
the young and old.

Dangers perish
And need ceases
Let those who perceive make known:
Let Paduans say.



So much of the English text in the version that circulates is padding not found in the Latin, but inserted to make it fit an 8.8.8.8 meter:

If, then, thou seekest miracles,
Death, error, all calamities,
The leprosy and demons flee,
The sick, by him made whole, arise.

Ant: The sea withdraws and fetters break,
And withered limbs he doth restore,
While treasures lost are found again,
When young or old his help implore.

All dangers vanish from our path,
Our direst needs do quickly flee:
Let those who know repeat the theme:
Let Paduans praise St. Anthony.

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Since the English is so awkward and its first stanza doesn't rhyme, maybe it would be best to just sing the Latin until someone makes a better singable translation.

By the way, this is not a comment on sdtalley's music; I just wish there were a better English text to work with.

English hyphenation according to the dictionary is often less helpful than starting each syllable with a consonant.

I find ca - la - mi - ty far easier to read and process when sight-singing, and it more accurately represents good singing technique as well.

Schönbergian, how did you do with ca-la-ma-ties? Ca-lam-a-ties at least looks slightly less like an olive.

FYI, you can definitely find English translations in the public domain, e.g. HERE.

My two cents on the rhythm: when I skimmed through, I was wondering if you might want to rebar into measures of varying lengths. It is a difficulty of composition, trying to articulate on paper what your mind's ear has come up with. I remember one place in a short art song I had written, trying to describe to the pianist how a certain note should be stretched and played out of rhythm. She couldn't get it. Finally she suggested that maybe I wanted a fermata on that note? Well, let me tell you, a fermata is what I wanted.

Good singing includes coping with standard hyphenation, bu tif you 'rego i ngto go Fre dua ri ngo nme I'll have to concede you a point for pos-ci-mus ;-)

How about fa-ther & moth-er?

I would compose this piece in irregular meter letting the text decide time signature measure by measure. JonathanKK is also hinting at the same.

I'm posting this with some revisions, unfortunately I have to have a looooooooooong time to think about these things as they should make sense audibly and visually. I took some of all y'alls advice and so far it looks ok, but being my own editor in addition to everything else is a fool's task.