Parallels:
S&T - 8ve's "That which" --Intentional, accentuating the ascending fourth
T&B - 5th's "lost in" --Ooops, yep, good catch
S&A - 8ve's "in hapless" --I assume you mean S&T? I guess I don't worry so much about parallel octaves or doubling as long as it's not a leading tone or a seventh. But would this be better if I just moved the tenor up to double the A an octave above the bass?
A&B - 8ve's "retrieve" (OK, in contrary motion; but even so.)
S&T - 8ve's "the tear-worn" Intentional, as with the opening ascending fourth
A&B - 5th's "of Adam's" --Yep, thanks
A&T - 5th's "Adam's" --Yep, thanks
Other ideas:
The tenor jump up to Ti and back on "hapless" is not ideal. My ear tends to agree, but I'm not sure what else I would want to do with it; would it be better double the Bb on A&T here?
The eighth notes in the alto on holy, I wish they went somewhere. They're playing off of the bass line; but yeah, it feels a bit stuck. I'll think about that one
S&B are 3rd's for the whole measure "thee have seen the", that may be too many in a row.Call it personal preference... I like it!
And running the Alto fa-sol and the Tenor up at the final cadence just isn't happy. I could triple the root and leave the fifth out, letting the alto complete the run down to the third. Thoughts?
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Those are the main things that leap out, if you are trying to keep the rules of 4-part writing. Parallels you really would get red pencil for in theory class. --I'm not, strictly, but I do like to make sure if I break them it's intentional and informed!
Alternatively, have you come up with any hypotheses yet for when parallels are permissible / necessary / a definite good, as far as your style goes? In 4-part writing I definitely believe in the merit of the rules as defined. In chant accompaniment and organ reharms, not always. The natural development of chant into organum made heavy use of parallel motion, and to my ear when applied tastefully parallel motion in accompaniment can be extremely effective in accentuating the language of chant.
Ha! you are in good company. In over fifty years as choirmaster-organist I have only once encountered parallel sevenths (in pre-XXth century music). They are in the second verset of the anonymous kyrie cunctipotens in Pierre Attaingnant's 1531 collection of organ pieces. With such august parentage you should feel free to use them to your heart's contentment.... long as its not a leading tone or a seventh...
With such august parentage you should feel free to use them to your heart's contentment.
Probably you will like your first one better?
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