I am dusting off another one of my hymns from a dark corner in my hard drive. Thoughts about text, harmony? How far into the land of musical dross does a 9-8 suspension over IV kick a piece?
I'm aware of how late these remarks are, but overall this is very good. I think the problem Jackson pointed out can be fixt with 'gavest'. I suggest you place this tune higher for congregational use. (Your sopranos are singing B ♭4s and your basses are singing E ♭2s.) If it's transposed it to C, your descent is to high. Without descant, here's my suggestions.
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