Another Hymn: "Non sum dignus"
  • liampmcdonough
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    I am dusting off another one of my hymns from a dark corner in my hard drive. Thoughts about text, harmony? How far into the land of musical dross does a 9-8 suspension over IV kick a piece?

    https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B-dmlfKeHhOJZXA0SFlXTm1uTjg/view?usp=sharing
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  • M. Jackson Osborn
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    This is really good.
    An original, sensitive, and imaginative tune.

    I do have trouble making sense of 'offr'est upon a tree so long ago on Calvary'. The syntax here is somewhat skewed.
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  • chonakchonak
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    I edited the thread title to add the name of the hymn under discussion.
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  • Samuel_Wright
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    I'm aware of how late these remarks are, but overall this is very good. I think the problem Jackson pointed out can be fixt with 'gavest'. I suggest you place this tune higher for congregational use. (Your sopranos are singing B ♭4s and your basses are singing E ♭2s.) If it's transposed it to C, your descent is to high. Without descant, here's my suggestions.
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  • Chris Garton-Zavesky
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    Liam,

    You get away with 19th-century schmaltz, without sounding schmaltzy. Well done!
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  • melofluentmelofluent
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    Was the decision to use the long "e" vowel as the rhyme agent for each line, all verses, a deliberate one?
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