A Hymn for Discussion: The Day Shall Never Yield to Night
  • Kathy
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    The day shall never yield to night
    when faith gives way to perfect sight.
    The Lamb shall be the only light,
    and He shall be the temple.

    The city streets are paved with gold.
    The final scroll shall be unrolled,
    and no one shall grow faint or old,
    for God shall be their glory.

    For now, we see as in a glass,
    but soon this childish way shall pass.
    Faith and hope and love shall last,
    and love shall be the greatest.

    For Love Himself our eyes shall see.
    The Lord is One, and ever Three,
    and in that happy company
    we shall rejoice forever.

  • IanWIanW
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    The absence of an anacrusis at the beginning of line three of the third stanza is problematic for a hymn. Perhaps "Then" might do the trick? With the change it would go well with the Conditor alme siderum chant.

    I know the music isn't yours, Kathy, but a re-voicing of the last chord of the third bar and the first of the next might be considered; perhaps (SATB) : c'' d' f# A | b' d' g G.

  • Kathy
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    The absence of an anacrusis at the beginning of line three of the third stanza is problematic for a hymn.

    Good point! Don't know why I hadn't noticed this before.
    Perhaps "Then" might do the trick?

    Or "When." Let me think about this.
    With the change it would go well with the Conditor alme siderum chant.

    Except for line 4, which always has 7 syllables.
  • IanWIanW
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    That's OK - two notes on the penultimate syllable.
  • Kathy
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    Interesting idea--and rhyme scheme!