Requesting feedback on my adaptation of the Salvator mundi antiphon to fit the text of the present-day Memorial Acclamation C and hopefully complement the setting of MA A with a chant more authentic than that currently provided by ICEL.
It's clearly borrowed from an existing chant. (This is a good thing). It looks as if you intend there to be 3 points at which congregations could join the singing: at the beginning, at qui per Crucem, and at Liberasti.
I would recommend regrouping the syllables/notes at -ra-sti. Put a- g on -"ra", and the e-f#-e on "sti". This gives the melody enough time to come gently into the cadence.
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